From the day I was a man born,
It was instilled into me to be a man strong:
Strong in mind,
Strong in the arms,
Strong-shouldered to carry life burdens,
Strong-willed to be all I could be in my lifetime
Then came you
A woman who made me see the light in the dark,
Darkness in the bright of the sun,
Feel the coolness in the hot summer breeze,
Feel the heat on the coldest of dark nights
You have become the woman who made me weak:
Weak in my mind thoughts,
Weak in my heart
You make me laugh when I don't want to,
You make me reflect on the good in my life while letting go of the bad,
You helped me learn patients when I no longer have none,
You taught me to forget while forgiving those who trespass against me
You are genuinely the weakness in me,
A fault I call by name,
Love
An erotic version of this poem is on my erotic poetry blog
Don't be shy; stop by...
I love that you were able to write two wonderful but different poems inspired from the song. Great job!
ReplyDelete:) thank you Sweets....
DeleteOkay you have totally out done yourself am visualising and encapsulating the feelings. I am on board with the last sentence.
ReplyDelete"You are truly the weakness in me,
A weakness I call by name,
Love "
Thank you as always, :)
Deletepeace
1ManView
I love this. The emotion in it calls to something in me... Too few men understand the value of revealing their vulnerabilities in love. If it's real love, you should be all the stronger for embracing and sharing that weakness with someone equally bared to you.
ReplyDelete:) :) Thank you, It use to be that quiet made us strong. Showing and doing was want we were taught. But today to be understood, we must speak out. It wasn't until I started to write did she understand what was inside me. I still don't say enough, but what can I say, old habits are hard to break, but writing is a start...
Delete1ManView
I am glad I don't have to pick one stanza over the other because I like them all. Very nicely done.
ReplyDeleteA humble thank you plain observer .....
ReplyDeletepeace and love
1ManView